Sweet as sap as far as the teratophilia goes... makes sense given moths are pollinators and mostly feed on nectar and other plant-based liquids....
Not sure about the mouthpart though given IIRC real-life lepidoptera don't usually (if at all) cover their proboscis... and the only moths with actual mandibles are those belonging to the micropterigidae family which lacked proboscis. I'm probably overthinking a bit much here though, given the mothman depicted is a vertebrate (mammalian skin, reptilian hemipenes, and what seems to be bird feathers) species with some moth anatomy instead of an insect with some vertebrate anatomy, so...
Your writing and anatomy both need a lot of work. You're overexplaining a lot of things; if something is obvious from a picture you don't need to describe it as much. Think what new information an audience is being given from what you're saying, and if that information is interesting to learn. If it's not, cut it.
The anatomy at the end was... I like diverse body types, but not in the way that it looked like six different people were mashed together. The belly and abdominals were separated and entirely disconnected from the skeleton, going in random directions.
Concept was cool though, the character was cute, the moth monster was good, and I really liked the pixel preview before the art load in. It really helped with the pacing and it was a clever touch.
Couple of questions. will impregnation occur? is the female lead a virgin? her dialogue leads me to believe she is. if she is could you do a quick hymen pop scene. This could be the basis of different routes, changing how the first encounter with the monster plays out i.e if virgin tries to either give head or anal to protect her virginity.
Mia (the lead) is a virgin. But she has no reason to 'protect' it besides not finding the right partner first.
I don't believe in the hymen breaking myth, but in the original draft there was a small amount of bleeding after the sex.
I plan this to be a linear story, so I probably wont do routes. Anal will most likely happen since he has two. No head however because I have a major phobia of choking.
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Sweet as sap as far as the teratophilia goes... makes sense given moths are pollinators and mostly feed on nectar and other plant-based liquids....
Not sure about the mouthpart though given IIRC real-life lepidoptera don't usually (if at all) cover their proboscis... and the only moths with actual mandibles are those belonging to the micropterigidae family which lacked proboscis. I'm probably overthinking a bit much here though, given the mothman depicted is a vertebrate (mammalian skin, reptilian hemipenes, and what seems to be bird feathers) species with some moth anatomy instead of an insect with some vertebrate anatomy, so...
Preemptive apologies for the word vomit.
Your writing and anatomy both need a lot of work. You're overexplaining a lot of things; if something is obvious from a picture you don't need to describe it as much. Think what new information an audience is being given from what you're saying, and if that information is interesting to learn. If it's not, cut it.
The anatomy at the end was... I like diverse body types, but not in the way that it looked like six different people were mashed together. The belly and abdominals were separated and entirely disconnected from the skeleton, going in random directions.
Concept was cool though, the character was cute, the moth monster was good, and I really liked the pixel preview before the art load in. It really helped with the pacing and it was a clever touch.
Couple of questions. will impregnation occur? is the female lead a virgin? her dialogue leads me to believe she is. if she is could you do a quick hymen pop scene. This could be the basis of different routes, changing how the first encounter with the monster plays out i.e if virgin tries to either give head or anal to protect her virginity.
So to answer those questions :
Hope this helps!
this is kinda cute, i like it goodjob
thank you!
Is there going to be a part 2?
That's the plan!
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